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Post by disneychannel on Nov 8, 2006 15:20:38 GMT -5
THE SUITE LIFE OF CODY...NOT ZACK
Chapter One
Cody walked down into the Tipton Lobby. He looked at The Candy Counter, but Maddie wasn't there. He sighed. He loved Maddie with all his heart, ever since before Zack liked Maddie. It was just that Cody was too embarrased to tell Maddie. He sighed, and sat down on the couch. Zack came running up to him. "Cody!" He yelled. "Wanna play some Extreme Zombie II in the arcade?" He asked him. Cody sighed; "Not today." He said. "I'm not really in a great mood." Zack looked at him, confused. "Why?" He asked him. Cody sighed again. "Never mind." He yelled. "Now leave me alone!" Zack hit him with a pillow. "Dude, tell me what's wrong!" He yelled. "No!" Cody yelled back. "NOW!" Zack yelled. "Or I'll tell everybody at school that you still sleep with a blanket!" Cody sighed; Zack had beat him again. He would have to tell Zack he liked Maddie. "I...like Maddie." Cody said. Zack gasped. "Cody, I need to tell you something. Maddie and I..."
Chapter Two will be up soon!
Please tell me if you like it!!
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Post by alyssa on Nov 8, 2006 15:22:44 GMT -5
Wow suspense. Very good so far.
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Post by Lymon on Nov 8, 2006 17:12:13 GMT -5
I like it, but I have one suggestion: Make it longer, and with more suspense. I know it's in chapters, but if you're doing suspense, it should be long. Like, you need to give little hints about what the next secret is, or elaborate on everything. Reflections on the characters(their thoughts on things) work well with adding to a storyline. So, if you make it longer, and with a more suspenseful feel, while we're waiting, we can try and piece together the puzzle.
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Post by cool on Nov 8, 2006 19:04:08 GMT -5
It's good  |
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Post by tamaki on Nov 8, 2006 23:09:27 GMT -5
I guess it's alright, just not alot for a chapter one. I'd understand if it was the Prolouge..
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Post by disneychannel on Nov 10, 2006 15:43:34 GMT -5
THE SUITE LIFE OF CODY...NOT ZACK
CHAPTER TWO
"...Are dating." Zack finished. Cody gasped. "Are you-Are you serious?" Cody said. Zack nodded. Cody ran, crying, and went into his hotel room. Maddie walked up. "Zack? What's going on with Cody?" She said. Zack sighed. "Cody likes you." He said. "And I just told him we're going out. You need to fix this." Maddie sighed, and said, "OK." She got into the elevator, and went up to his room.
She knocked on the door. "Cody?" She said. "It's Maddie."
Cody could hear Maddie. "Go away!" He yelled. "I never want to talk to you again! How could you go out with my brother?"
Maddie noticed that the door was unlocked, so she walked in. "Cody, I know you don't want to talk to me, but you have to." She said. "I like your brother. A Lot. I didn't even know you liked me."
Cody sniffed. "Don't talk to me." He yelled.
Maddie sighed. "Cody, please. You need to understand, that..." Then, she leaned into Cody, and kissed him.
When the kiss broke, Cody smiled. "When should I break it to Zack?" He said.
CHAPTER THREE COMING SOON!
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Post by disneychannel on Nov 12, 2006 14:01:05 GMT -5
THE SUITE LIFE OF CODY...NOT ZACK
CHAPTER THREE
Maddie smiled. "Cody, I don't think you need to tell Zack about any of this." She said.
Cody frowned. "Why not?" He said. "I mean, you kissed me. Doesn't that mean you like me?"
"Just keep it on the DL." Maddie said. "I mean, we can still go out, right? Even with me going out with Zack still? Right?"
Cody frowned. "You mean, you're going to two-time both of us?!" He cried.
Maddie frowned. "I wouldn't call it two-timing." She said. "I just don't want to break your brother's heart."
"You will if you do this." Cody said. "Maddie, I like you, but I'm not going to do this."
Maddie frowned, and kissed him more passionetly than she said before. "Change your mind?" She asked him.
Cody smiled. "Sure did." He said.
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Zack was in the arcade room, playing some games. Cody entered. "Hey, Cody." He said. "Did Maddie talk to you?"
Cody's stomach hurt. "Yes." He said. "It hurt, but, I just have to face the fact that you're her boyfriend."
Zack smiled. "Thanks, man." He said. "I really like Maddie. She's so nice. I know that she would never do what Victoria did to me."
"What exactly did Victoria do to you?" Cody asked him.
"She cheated on me." Zack replied. "Didn't I tell you?"
Cody frowned, and his stomach hurt more than it ever did. "Zack, I gotta tell you something..."
CHAPTER FOUR COMING SOON!
P.S. I know I made Maddie totally OOC, but for this story to work I had to do it.
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Post by Lymon on Nov 12, 2006 14:06:16 GMT -5
One thing: try and keep the characters in character. A true fanfiction goes with the storyline, but keeps all of the characters in character. Even if Maddie had to be OOC for that part, try taking another path that will go along with her character.
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Post by cool on Nov 12, 2006 23:12:58 GMT -5
its really good |
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Post by disneychannel on Nov 23, 2006 10:44:51 GMT -5
((Sorry I haven't posted in a while guys, I was grounded and just really busy. But here's the long awaited Chapter Four!))
The Suite Life of Cody...Not Zack.
Chapter Four
"What is it?" Zack asked, worried. "Is it my hair?" He checked his hair.
Cody laughed. "No, it's not your hair." He said. "It's something about Maddie."
Zack looked up. "What is it? I thought you were over her!"
Cody gulped. "Zack, this isn't easy for me to say, but, Maddie and I are going out."
"But, she's going out with me!" Zack cried. "She can't go out with both of us!"
"She is." Cody said. "She wants both of us. She's using you, Zack, and she's using me too."
"Oh my gosh." Zack whispered. "I promised myself this would never happen again."
"I'm sorry, Zack." Cody said, frowning.
"It's not your fault," Zack said. "You were under a love spell for her. It's her fault. Man, I'm going to kill her..."
"No, Zack, wait!" Cody said. "You can't do that. She's a girl, remember?"
"Not when I get done with her..." Zack yelled.
"Zack, stop!" Cody yelled. "Listen, we can get back at her, but not physically. All we need is a little plan, and a lot of help from the girl who created the word 'gossip'."
"You don't mean..." Zack said.
Cody nodded. "Yup." He said. "London."
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"She did WHAT?" London said. "Zack, Cody, that's not like Maddie! She's usually so...Goody-Good."
"I know." Cody said. "Which is why she tricked us. We need your help, London."
"Well, Maddie is my friend..." London said. "What would we do?"
"Start a rumor about her." Cody said.
"I don't know, Cody." London said. "I learned my lesson when I spread that rumor about her and Lance. I don't think I should."
"London, this is the girl who made you dress up as a bunny because she was jealous of you. And she was the girl who stole your man just to win a game. I think you deserve a little payback." Cody said.
London thought about it. "OK." She said. "When do we start?"
Cody smiled. "Soon." He said. "Let me just make the plan."
"I thought you already made the plan?!" Zack yelled.
"Actually, the plan was to ask London." Cody said.
"That's a stupid plan!" Zack yelled.
"Ya think?!" Cody yelled back.
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Sorry guys I know stupid ending but it's hard to end a chapter! OK well Chapter Five should be up by Friday or Saturday...not sure when! Comments please! Thanks and enjoy Thanksgiving :-)
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